Category: Writers Block
this is my poem I spent all night writing. I hope you guys like this.
I hear the wind howling, smell the great scent of pinetrees swaying, I hear the soft music of birds, the fluttering of wings,
I feel the leafy trees hanging, hanging, above my earings.
Storm clouds are gathering, stars are glowing, I am softly swaying,
In the beautiful greatly decorated forest!
A soft flute is playing, I am swaying, to the beautiful sound!
A hum fills the air, and then I found,
A really huge doorway.
I enter there slowly, carefully, so as not to disturb the still air.
A voice from inside says, “come to my lair!”
You should always try to avoid using nonspecific adjectives like great and
really. They don't actually mean anything. If I say a girl was really pretty, it
doesn't tell you anything about the girl other than the fact that I thought she
was really pretty. Why was she really pretty? see what I mean?
hey, stop judging, Cody. Thanks but, you are not my English teacher.
in yo face!
I don't think that was done with bad intentions, just some advice.
It actually sounds like something I might have written, eh, so we kind of have similar styles. Or at least something I'd hae written a while ago. I got stranger in time. :P
here is a new one. Actually, I fixed it for yall know it alls!
I hear the wind howling, smell the great scent of pinetrees swaying,
I hear the soft music of birds flying, I find myself praying,
I feel the leafy trees hanging, hanging, above my bearings.
Storm clouds are gathering, stars are glowing,
I don’t feel like I am floating.
A soft flute is playing, I am swaying, to the beautiful sound!
A hum fills the air, and then I found,
A doorway for wich it’s round!
I enter there slowly, carefully, so as not to disturb the still air.
A voice from inside says, “come to my lair!”
A girl is there, with flowing hair,
Her eyes are as cold as the frozen air!
She says in a squeaky voice,
“will you make a choice?”
soooo... I'm still waiting for your choice...
:D not bad, dear
Yes, I say, with a laugh.
the girl giggles then, bringing out an aircraft!
how's that? I could ryme all day!
LOL That choice is funny. I think this is a pretty good poem. Good imagery.
thanks, Darren. Might write another soon.
and I'll answer. grins
It could turn into some kind of story in the end. mmm, stories
yeah, that I'm really good at. :)
me too!
nice Sia
thanks, amy! sista, thanks so much! I might become famous? not.